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Revision how-to: Taking your novel to the mat Scriva Style

by Amber Keyser
Published on: April 16, 2012
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I now have critiques on my completed YA novel from eight Scrivas.  We met and discussed the whole book.  I have pages of notes from those conversations as well as 1-2 pages critique written by each Scriva plus line edits in eight copies of the manuscript.

Now what?

I’ve posted about this before, but I thought you might be interested in the specifics of this revision.  The Angel Punk novel is 95K words (~375 pages) and 53 chapters as of the end of the current draft.  It’s told from five different points of view.

Step 1:  Read through all the notes and summary critiques from Scrivas.

Step 2:  Make a list of major issues (7 in all), consistency issues between the book and the movie and comics (3), list of medium priority issues (12 in all), and minor issues (lots)

Step 3:  Biggest issues to deal with include (a) MCs motivations, (b) her history with the other characters, (c) timing of the introduction of world-building back story.

Analysis Plan: Read through novel and note when/where every bit of backstory occurs.

Attack Plan: Move up the backstory even if this involves rearranging/combining chapters.  Use this opportunity to include more of what the MC is thinking and feeling about her past and the people around her.

Step 4:  Repeat for other major issues followed by medium ones.

Step 5:  Go through and incorporate line edits from Scrivas.

Step 6:  Read all chapters for the same POV character in sequence.  Fix voice and plot consistency.

Step 7:  Read through all and add sensory details whenever possible.

Step 8:  Use “find” function to search for words/phrases that I know I overuse.

 

…  And do it all in the next two weeks.  Wish me luck!

 

 

2012 Challenge: REVISE like a pro – Scriva secrets for applying critique to your mss

by Amber Keyser
Published on: January 1, 2012
Categories: Craft
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My notes from Scriva meeting

You might expect me to start the New Year off with a motivational post.

But you’d be wrong.  Dead wrong!

I’m rolling up my sleeves and commanding you to get dirty.  In other words: REVISE.  Say you’ve formed a great critique group and you’ve been submitting manuscripts.  You’ll come home with something like this: eight copies of your manuscript hacked up by eight different writers.  You might also come home with a panic attack.  What are you going to do with all those comments?

Here’s what I do.

I take detailed notes during Scriva meetings, which I organize by Scriva.  At the end, I’ll have several sheets of notepaper where I have listed the big picture comments that the Scrivas felt were important enough to say out-loud (as opposed to leaving for me to review on my own).  Often this list mirrors the summary comments some Scrivas include with my manuscript.  I begin with these big picture comments.  I read through all of them and look for common threads.  If several Scrivas mention a lag in pacing in Chapter 5 or a completely confusing battle scene or a lapse in voice in Chapter 6, I know those are things I need to look at.  I make a list of issues with the hardest, biggest ones at the TOP.

Summary comments from Addie and Michelle

It’s tempting to go through and make the little picky changes first (word choice, punctation, rearrangement of clauses), but DON’T!  You will be wasting your time.  Many of these issues with change or vanish with major revision.  You’ve got to take on the big stuff first.  Trust me!

OK, so say I’m going to attack Chapter 5.  Scrivas mentioned a lag in pacing and a several sections where I fall out of POV (for example).  I will take a pass through the chapter ONLY thinking about POV.  I want to examine every sentence to make sure it keeps the correct POV.  I won’t refer back to the written comments from the Scrivas, but mentally I maintain a laser focus on POV.  Then I go back through Chapter 5 with the single purpose of speeding things up.  Can I replace description with dialogue?  Can I cut unnecessary or rambling sentences?  Can I make my sentences shorter and punchier?  All of this will help pacing.

Now, I take the printed manuscripts annotated with more specific comments and turn all of them to the first page of Chapter 5.  I go through page by page, collating and applying the comments from all the Scrivas to each page of the chapter.  Not all will still be relevant because of the way I addressed major issues in the first few passes through the chapter, but there will still be work to do.

A collection of critiqued copies of my mss

I’ll repeat this with each chapter, taking a single pass through for every area of concern before I go on to the next chapter.  Your brain might be able to revise for three things at once, but mine can’t.  I’d rather go through each one five times — or whatever it takes.  When I think I’m done, I go through the list of big picture comments again and check things off.   I don’t make all the changes the Scrivas suggest but I always consider each one carefully.

So here’s my 2012 challenge to you: Don’t be afraid of those critique comments.  Turn each one into a knife that will cut to the core of your story with deft precision.  And take it slow – one comment at a time.

A Post-Santa Post on Multiple Drafts

by Ruth Tenzer Feldman
Published on: December 26, 2011
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Santas

Santa Clones in Portland

Let’s do the math. It takes me on average about four drafts of a 250-word post before I’m ready to show it to the world. The books I write are, say, about 60,000 words long. So, 60,000 divided by 250 is 240 “post-units.” At four drafts per “post-unit,” that would be 960 drafts. That’s all?

Seriously, folks. I’m willing to put in the time and energy to revise and rewrite. I don’t go berserk when I realize that my story would be better if I killed off a minor character or rejiggered a scene. My downfall is when I make those final edits that change a draft ever so slightly, or add the tiniest bit more color to a scene. I lose patience when the draft I’m working on, like the Santa on the pedestal, starts looking like all my other recent drafts, and it’s hard to tell one draft from another. What to do, what to do?

Here’s where a critique group is invaluable. With so many different eyes reviewing, say, Draft #87, there is bound to be someone who remembers a turn-of-phrase that (s)he preferred back in Draft #86, or who still has the enthusiasm to suggest a rewording for Draft #88.

Critique group members are also a great resource for telling you when to stop revising. Enough! One Santa does really look and feel just like the other. No more tweaking.

In addition to a critique group, it often helps to put your most recent drafts in your virtual or real desk drawer for a few days, or for a few weeks if you can afford to. Your drafts won’t change, but you will have become a different reader.

And now back to my post-Santa revisions. With the help of the Scrivas, my next book should be ready to shine by this time next year. That would be draft number…?

Ack! My group members disagree about my mss. What do I do?

by Amber Keyser
Published on: September 16, 2011
Categories: Craft
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Often the Scrivas are unanimous in their feedback.  If they all suggest killing characters, then I oil up the guillotine and start hacking off heads.  That’s a no-brainer.

Then there are the “other” times when conflict reigns supreme.  Confession: we have actually called votes.

“Who likes it in first person?”
“Third?”
“First person it is.  Get on that revision, Scriva!”

For Angel Punk, my YA novel-in-progress, consensus has been a fleeting thing.  There was an even split between love and hate on the first prologue.  I ditched it and tried again.  Half the Scrivas missed the old prologue.  The new had one “aye” vote.  That one’s going in the crapper too.  Point of view (POV) is also an area of contention.  Some lobby for 1st person, others for close-in 3rd person.  I was hoping for 3rd person omniscient but it looks like that is making me lose the voice.  Ack!

So what do you do when you get contradictory feedback?

First, I try to understand the feedback behind the feedback.  Do they hate the prologue because they miss the main character’s voice or because it seems to offer superfluous information or because it distracts from the main themes that I’m trying to address? I need to find out what I’m actually trying to say.

One approach I sometimes use is to write it in plain language so I’m not distracted by fancy-pants words or attempts at subtlety.  For example, “Mara acts tough but she’s on shaky ground because she doesn’t really know who or what she is.”  I know I can’t use that verbage in the book but it might give me clarity to know that the prologue should show Mara’s confusion without her losing face by being too weepy or confessional.

Second, I check out books that have succeeded in areas where I struggle.  Again thinking about Mara, she has personality qualities that are similar to Katniss in The Hunger Games, Katsa in Graceling, and Karou in Daughter of Smoke and Bone.  What was the POV for those characters?  Can that help me figure out which POV will work best for Mara?

Third, I have to accept that the Scriva majority may be most representative of my readers. In my first draft of Angel Punk, I tried to use short, fast-paced scenes – each of which shifted POV – to give a comic book, action-adventure feel to the story.  One Scriva loved it.  The others were lost.  I loved it too and was tempted to stick with my experimental style, but I want people to read my book.  If a handful of brilliant Scrivas were lost, then chances are many of my readers would be too.  I went back to more traditional approach.

The take-home from this (at least for me) is that sometimes contradictory feedback is the best feedback because it forces me to go deep, analyze more, and find absolute clarity on what I’m trying to achieve with the work.

Book Recommendation: The Writing & Critique Group Survival Guide

by Amber Keyser
Published on: July 25, 2011
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The more I read Becky Levine‘s book, The Writing & Critique Group Survival Guide, the more impressed I am.  The depth and breadth of topics in this book are remarkable.  Case in point: the subheading reads “How to Give and Receive Feedback, Self-Edit, and Make Revisions.”

Yes, this book will help you create a functioning critique group.  But it also addresses craft with some serious chops.  The coolest features are the examples where she gives a critique on a manuscript and also a variety of worksheets that help you execute on the suggestions in the book.

The major sections include:

Choosing, joining, creating, and running a group.
Critiquing novel-length fiction
Critiquing nonfiction (yay – someone remembers us!)
Critiquing picture books
How to revise based on critique
How to grow your group as members evolve

Pick up a copy!  You will not be disappointed!

My work’s been critiqued and I feel (add descriptive word here)… More on PCSD

by Amber Keyser
Published on: June 20, 2011
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Recently Nicole posted about PCSD (“post critique stress disorder”).  Her words seemed to resonate with readers.  What writer hasn’t had the experience of receiving a marrow-touchingly thorough critique only to sit and wonder what the heck to do about it?  Roni Loren went a step further and detailed (with hilarious pictures) the Ten Stages of Revision Emotions on her blog.

Here’s the teaser (paraphrased):

“Dammit, that makes sense.”
“I can totally fix this.”
“Oh, Sh*t”
Lalalalala, I can’t hear you.
Drowning in my beer.
Hello, Muse.
“Happy Dance Time”
Mania
Peace
What? You want another revision?

Take the time to read the whole thing here.   We’ve got some posts planned to take on how to revise based on critique so stay-tuned!

PCSD (“Post-Critique Stress Disorder” and What to Do About It)

by Nicole Marie Schreiber
Published on: May 13, 2011
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You know you’ve felt it—the tensing up of the fingers as pools of sweat build at your temples, while your eyes stare blankly at the computer screen, moving from there to the many margin notes and cross-outs scrawled all over the freshly-critiqued manuscript you just received back the day before…

There’s no denying it.  You’ve come down with a case of PCSD, otherwise known as Post-Critique Stress Disorder.

But what can you do about it?  Never fear, because the Scrivas are here to help!

It’s very normal to feel bewildered and a little lost (or very, very lost) when you return to your story right after having it critiqued either by your critique group, an editor, agent, or published author at an SCBWI or other writing event, a paid critique person, or even your own editor or agent asking for revisions.  If you don’t happen to feel this way, that’s great!  You’ve bypassed the gauntlet of emotions that can sometimes happen, and you’re free and clear to whip that manuscript into shape.  But for many of us writers, rereading comments after a critique and applying them to our stories can be a daunting task that can sometimes make us feel like this:

  1. I’m a horrible writer and what am I wasting my time for?
  2. I’m not good enough to be among the other writers in my critique group and they probably wish that they could kick me out (or I’m not good enough to be at this writer’s conference and don’t belong here)
  3. I’m never going to make it (if you aren’t published yet)
  4. I’m finished and won’t ever publish again.  My other books were just a fluke. (Or I’ve lost my touch.)
  5. I’ll never be able to change genres, and I should just stick to non-fiction picture books (or whatever genre I’ve published in.)
  6. This story is terrible, and I should just give up.
  7. Oh, and did I say that I’m a horrible writer and what am I wasting my time for?

The list can go on and on, but you get the picture.  There are so many negative things that our “inner critic” can tell us, bringing us down.  Don’t listen to it!   Instead, you can try to overcome Post-Critique Stress Disorder with techniques such as these:

1.  Always think of THE WORK as a separate entity from YOURSELF.  Your manuscript is not you.  When it is being critiqued, don’t ever think of it as YOU being critiqued.  This is very hard for artists to do, but we must release our emotions over our manuscripts so that it can be shaped into the best piece of art it can be.

2.  Listen without speaking as your critique group, or whoever has critiqued your work, discusses your manuscript with you, and take all the comments in without judgment.  Now, hopefully you are having your manuscript critiqued by a professional who knows how to properly critique (bringing up what works and is positive about the piece as well as what could be improved).  If not, then the critique isn’t as meaningful, and you should get another opinion!

3.  Give yourself some “space” between you and your recent critique by waiting a few days before rereading over the comments given to you.  It’s amazing how you end up seeing the manuscript differently when you yourself haven’t read it in a while.

4.  Read your positive comments first (yes, there should ALWAYS be something positive about the piece) to give yourself courage to move on to what needs work.

5.  Write down all of your “inner critic’s” comments (like those negative ones mentioned above) and either burn them in the fireplace, throw them away, or stuff them into a box, never to be opened.  You are getting rid of them literally to free your mind up to the revisions ahead.  You don’t need all of that baggage.

6.  If you’ve had your work critiqued by a group, then when you do look over the critiques, notice where the comments “overlap.”  There is a reason why two or more people felt the same way about something.  This works for both positive comments and things that need improvement. “Overlapping comments” should be considered carefully and could be considered the beginning of a “revision roadmap” for you, helping to lessen the feeling of being “lost” when going back to your work.

7.  Be open to new ideas instead of fighting them.  It doesn’t hurt to try things a different way and then decide the best way for you. Remember, your work is your own, but always be open to new possibilities.  The best critique group (as well as other people critiquing your work) always want what is best for THE WORK, and are not out to hurt it or you.

8.  And finally, when all else fails, CHOCOLATE HELPS!  :-)

Happy revising!

-Nicole Marie Schreiber

http://www.nicolemarieschreiber.com

http://nicolemarieschreiber.wordpress.com

 

 

Shout out to Janice Hardy at The Other Side of the Story

by Amber Keyser
Published on: May 10, 2011
Categories: Basics, Craft
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Come all ye interested in learning how to be an expert giver of killer revision suggestions. On The Other Side of the Story, Janice Hardy has some great tips and then a fascinating example of the interplay between critique and revision.

May 6th blog on how to give a good critique.

May 7th blog on critique in action.

Giving the full draft of a novel the Scriva treatment

by Amber Keyser
Published on: April 23, 2011
Categories: Critique Process, Genre
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Most writers find the words to the left rather satisfying to write.  Of course, we also know that the end is never the end until the mss is pried from our zombie fingers.

When a Scriva finishes the first draft of a novel (or book length nonfiction), we usually want to get a global perspective from the other Scrivas.  It’s the only way to properly assess voice, story arc, plot consistency, character development, and other features that must be sustained throughout the entire piece.

To do this, we scrap our typical meeting structure and move into novel mode. We dedicate an entire meeting to the novel.  The writer prints and mails a full copy to each of us as far in advance as possible (ideally 3-4 weeks).  We each do a full read.  We try to resist line edits (difficult for Scrivas) because we know the details may change.  We’re reading for the bones.

Typically we provide overall feedback and pull out example passages that are really working (and therefore should be the writer’s model for revision) and ones that miss the mark.  It is helpful to suggest novels with similar features for the writer to read.

Our goals are to give the writer a concrete plan of attack for the revision and the encouragement to get right to it.

 

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